Before:”Having a strong social media and a strong online connection can help me adjust to academic and social life at UNE. through platforms like facebook, instagram, snapchat, i can join groups related to my course or major, connect with classmates and stay updated about whatever event is going on on campus. All of these connections can provide support and help get friends and settle smoother. On the other hand, social media can also negatively impact my adjustment. Spending too much time online can distract me from my studies and reduce face to face interaction with others which is important for building friendships. Being online with virtual friends might also prevent me from fully engaging in the campus experience. Personally the first argument is more relatable to my experience. Because online connections have been supportive and informative, helping me feel more connected and actually knowing what happen around me. Here is my paragraph how would I put it”

After: “Having a strong social media presence and online connections has help me adjust to academic and social life at UNE. Through platforms like Facebook, Instagram, and Snapchat, I can join groups related to my course or major, connect with classmates, and stay updated about events on campus. These connections has provide support and help me make friends and settle in more smoothly. On the other hand, social media can also negatively impact my adjustment. Spending too much time online can distract me from my studies and reduce face-to-face interaction, which is important for building friendships. Being online with virtual friends might also prevent me from fully engaging in the campus experience.


In the revised version, I corrected capitalization errors (e.g., “facebook” to “Facebook”), improved sentence structure for clarity, and ensured consistency in tone. These changes made the paragraph more professional and easier to read.