Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).

through out High school revision was mostly about going over what you’ve already learned in class and making sure you understand the main ideas. i used read through my notes, checking for spelling errors and Teachers often help by giving us review sheets or guiding for us to focus on. It’s was all about making sure our writing clear, checking for spelling and grammar mistakes, and making sure that my essays have a good structure. which is very different from College revision is different i’ve learned it involves a deeper understanding of the material. Instead of just memorizing facts, i needed to think about how things connect and apply and also bringing my voice which was hard at first because i was not used to it , and it has to be very specific and well explained. and paraphrasing so that not everything is crowed up with extra words. Time management is important since there’s a lot of work to do. adding my personal experience into my writing had definitely strengthen it instead of always having the author’s ideas. College revision focuses on really understanding the material and being able to explain it clearly.

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Body paragraph from essay 3 before revision

The same Body paragraph from essay 3 after Revision

Above is the same paragraph from my essay. Evaluating the importance of how we view joy before and after revision. in my draft, I wasn’t explaining property everything was messy, and too many words crowded each other making it hard to understand i started with my thesis like I taught in high school and the paragraph lacked my voice but was not there. it also lacks the author’s idea. during my revision i was more specific explaining my personal experience and also bring the other voice. i also paraphrase this time the word are not too crowded up like they were in my draft. revising helped me refine my ideas, clarify my thought and it allowed me to cut unnecessary details and being more specific with my personal experience has strengnthen my written it helped me develop a stronger voice.