Be able to critique their own and others’ work by emphasizing global revision early in the writing process and local revision later in the process.

At first, I felt awkward about the idea of peer review, especially when having someone read my work right next to me while I did the same for them. It made me feel exposed, especially because of how insecure I am when it comes to my writing as if my thoughts and writing skills were being judged in real time. In high school, peer review felt different because most of the time, we weren’t expected to sit down face to face and talk about each other’s work. Usually, we just left comments on paper or handed back assignments quietly. It felt less personal and easier Now, having to actually discuss feedback in the moment was very awkward but I come to realize the more I did it the more I felt more comfortable especially because reading someone else’s work made me realized things I could fix in my own writing and getting feedback was helpful to help me improve . I’ve realized that getting real time reactions helps me see my strengths and weaknesses more clearly, and reading someone else’s work up close shows me different approaches to writing that I hadn’t considered before.

Below is the End comment I left on Collin’s essay

I think this was my best end comment especially because i was more comfortable doing it. I talk about thing I noticed and really liked about my peer’s essay is how clear and organized his ideas are. he explained his main points in a way that was easy to follow, and his use of quotes adds strong support into his arguments. I also liked how they made meaningful connections between his ideas and the writers , which made his essay feel thoughtful. and how his idea about joy was very similar to what i had wrote.

Below is the end comment my peer left on my third essay

This comment was really helpful for my essay because it pointed out things I didn’t notice, like the importance of putting my thesis at the end of the introduction and conclusion. It made me think about how having a clear thesis early on can help my essay feel more focused and organized. he also suggested on how i could format my quotes better which was also useful because it gave me an idea of how to make my analysis stronger and easier to follow. I liked that the comment recognized the personal experiences I included, which gave me confidence in what I did well while also helping me see where I could improve.

Here is a screenshot of how I moved my thesis kind to the end rather than having it at the beginning of my essay

My essay sounded way better being somewhere at the end of the introduction. In high school, it had to be the first thing in my writing and I would often get lost. That is what I’ve been doing and I did it in my essays one and two because I’m so used to it so being reminded about it in essay 3 was effective in my essay.